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Sometimes, she is my mistress
Sneaking in through my window and seducing me out of sleep
She keeps me up past sunrise, whispering sweet promises in my ear
Silencing me with her smoldering passion, stripping me until inspiration strikes
She makes me sing, until the sheets are slathered in a thick skin of poetry
Sending shivers up my spine and igniting my senses with her ghostly fingers
She is a lover and a shadow, nowhere to be seen when I wake

Sometimes, she is my psychosis
Suffocating and strong, I can do nothing but submit to her grasp
She seethes, like a snake constricting around me until my sight blurs to smoke
Slowly, she consumes me with sick reverence and searing obsession
She stifles me because she refuses to be restrained, yet I long for her kiss
Severing haggard breaths from my lips, leaving me stunned and aching
She is a succubus and a nightmare, haunting me

Sometimes, she is my saint
Stifling sobs against my shoulder, shaking me until my tears start to fall
She has so much to say, so many secrets to share and sweep me away with
Shadowing her eyes from the sun, she starts to speak, and I am helpless to her
She smiles against my wrists and whispers countless stories to me
Serene yet sad, she bottles her sighs and leaves them stored in my chest
She is a safe haven, but I know she only came to say good bye

Sometimes, she is a statue
Staring, lifeless, existing only to my senses
She doesn’t speak, doesn’t breathe
Yet I seek her all the same
I know it was intended as a joke, but I read a comment once that said "My favorite tragic love story is between an artist and their muse"
Didn't plan for this to turn into an exercise in alliterations though, oops!

A lot of times I don't post my writing/poetry until I come up with an illustration to go with it, but I think this is one of those pieces that stands by itself better.

Let me know what you guys think!

You can also find this on Tumblr
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DerpyMabelPhinabella Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes! Wonderful! Beautiful!
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much!
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DerpyMabelPhinabella Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
your welcum.
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DizzyTestament Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
AMAZING!

I love all the images you come with in this. Didn't think of artist and muse immediately, but it makes sense. Sometimes I get that feeling myself. (It's a shame we don't think muses are males, usually). Beautifully written. Even a little inspirational.

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Tyshea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much! :)

Haha, I usually see my muse as female, probably cause I tend to like girls more that way? Feels like I'm chasing someone I like I guess :lol:
Glad you like it though!
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DizzyTestament Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
I think in Greek lore, they are females as well. I know when I think of muses, they're female to me too. I think females are more inspiring, both physically and mentally. So it makes sense to me.
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SassyRaptor Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Filmographer
I love how every single line, but the last one stated with the letter "S" - was that intentional? o:

This is fantastic! Chilling, really, the words are used so beautiful, and there's a definite sense of rhythm to them. 

Beautifully written. c:
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Yeah, it was intentional, the rhythm even changes in the last stanza to bring focus to it and slow down the reader's pace 
Thank you!
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
This is really cool! I love the idea. I feel like there are some parts where the "flow" seems a bit off, but I won't point those out unless you want to change stuff around. :D Still a favorite regardless. :)
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you very much! I'd actually love to know your thoughts :)
Not sure if I'll revisit it, but it's always good to know next time I tackle something like this
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
Well I guess the main thing is to look at the "heartbeat" of your poetry. More or less naturally our speech, and subsequently our writing, falls into a pattern. In poetry in particular you can see this rhythm, mostly when the rhythm is disrupted. 

For example, "She keeps me up past sunrise, whispering sweet promises in my ear." In this, you have the "heartbeat"... she KEEPS me UP past SUNrise. WHISpering (this word is iffy but can stay)... the promises part is the problem mostly. It's too soft at the end, so that you have two "downbeats" instead of one up, one down, like the rest of your piece. So you might find a synonym? "Whispering sweet secrets", perhaps, or assurance (assURance), or something.

Another example is trying to fit too many syllables into one line, like here: "Silencing me with her smoldering passion, stripping me until inspiration strikes". This one has a more simple fix: just cut the 'until' to 'til' (NOT 'till) and there you go. It cuts out an extra syllable, keeps the rhythm. 

Also not quite sure what you mean by "sing" in the first stanza, since you related it to poetry, unless you intend for your poems to be song lyrics?

There are more little details but I think that's enough for now. Let me know if you want elaboration on anything. 
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
No that makes a lot of sense, thank you so much!
I know rhythm is what I struggle with the most, and I guess I got a little caught up in the alliterations in this piece that I lost track of it completely.
I'll definitely keep that in mind, and maybe even revisit this piece in the future.

As a question, do you always suggest doing "down > up > down > up" beat patterns, or was it because of the general flow of the rest of my piece?

I really appreciate the time you took to help me out, means a lot :)
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RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
Rhythm is definitely part of the "revision" process for sure. You have to slow down and think, but it's okay if you don't want to. :-P

As for the rhythm, that is what I noticed with yours so I focused on making the other parts fit that. Incidentally, it is the most common form in speech and in poetry... however here is a link to the other forms (it's really short, won't take up much time at all). www.writing.upenn.edu/~afilrei… If you want a challenge, you should try writing in all five forms. 

As an aside, I think your attitude is absolutely darling and you have gained a new watcher. :)
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Ahh, thanks for the link! I think I will try to challenge myself to using these sometime

Also, glad to gain a watcher! :D
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NinaValdezn87 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
i love the way the images just speak to you i can see it all playing it in my mind you are a wonderful writer!
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
wow, thank you so much! I'm flattered :blushes:
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NinaValdezn87 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
haha you are so very welcome :)
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This imagery is amazing, I'm dumbfounded with how beautiful this is. The pictures it creates in my head are so beautiful.
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much! :blush:
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You are very welcome. Even though I stay silent I do view all of your work and love it :)
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DeviantLilGirl Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
I FRIGGIN LOVE THIS SOOOO MUCH!!! you know whats funny? two of my oc's have a relationship, sort of like this... its funny, and neither of them make a move, its like their more in awe of eachother, as well as in love. I LOVE YOUR POEMS SOOOO MUCH!!
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks dude! :)
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alabaster-Islie Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
casting a sweet face on me
she is my soulless spring
and my loving winter
dead but still alive
alive but still dead
blank but painted with laughter
beautiful but empty
~silent somebody~
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Nikkeila Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I totally love how you portrayed her and brought her to life. Great work. Keep it up...
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much!
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Reckless-Flame Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
:heart: So wonderfully written, as always! Your poetry always has such depth and imagery to it, and it flows so nicely!
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you! I'm glad to hear it :blushes:
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red-revolutionary Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
well, you're right. no need for illustration. this is pure and raw. I love it. take care.
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much! :)
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red-revolutionary Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
sure
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victorialen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Interface Designer
wow
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IrisCuas Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Please tell me ur a man!!... Haha jk

Gorgeously Expressed.. ;)
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IrisCuas Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
I think I fell in love..... lol
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
haha, thank ya! :)
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ginnyw143 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
This is beautiful! And so accurate. I love the idea, and how you took something that at face value is a funny joke but took it to the deeper, meaningful truth in the statement.

Wonderful job.
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much! :)
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goninja Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student General Artist
Reminds me of girl. Lol I'm a little love sick.
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Zanedia Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is absolutely beautiful <3
Great work!
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much!
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tehreema Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Beautiful..
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
:love:
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18273 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
oh how im burning with desire galathea beautyfull one (poem of ovid )

cool stuff for the lady legendar
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you so much! :)
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DeathByCelloCase Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The words you used are hauntingly beautiful. Amazing piece! c:
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Tyshea Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you! :blush:
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Xyloverflow Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have an incredible talent with words, this is stupendous! :love:
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